He came out of the house he started to run at us.
“We have to run” said Jessie.
He was catching up we started to run. We ran into a forest and stopped.
“Have we lost him” said John. They both looked around to see if he was there, a cold hand touched John and he screamed like a little girl, embarrassed he told Jessie to be quiet and not to scream. The man told them his name was Mike he explained that, that man was his brother and at that moment a knife was sent straight though Mike’s back.
Your story was great, it makes me want to read on and find out what happens next. Remember to proof read though.
Hello Bill,
This is quite an exciting chapter to the prompt graphic story. I could feel it when you wrote “cold hand.” Descriptive details always add interest for your readers. Good job.
Barbara McFall, Team 100WC
The Phoenix School, Salem, MA US
Hello and sorry for the delay in replying. We have been working round the clock to read everyone’s entry.
Great pace and excitement here! Just the thing needed for a successful comic story. I hope you had fun writing this, I certainly enjoyed reading it.
Thank you so much for your response and be sure to get your class checking http://www.ian-crowford.com and our twitter page @MUSOMIC for updates on the lucky winner. Also, the shortlisted entries will be added to the site very shortly so more people can read it.
On the website we’ll have more competitions for you to win the new MUSOMIC ‘APP’ and more. Your class can join the mailing list so you won’t miss a trick.
We will be hosting our own very special contest soon, so if you enjoyed this then I’m certain you’ll LOVE the next one.
Thanks again.
Ian
Creator of MUSOMIC.
@musomic
Highly anticipated comic building ‘App’ out March 2014